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Getbig Main Boards => Gossip & Opinions => Topic started by: hpac on December 06, 2006, 07:48:19 PM
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Hey guys,
I have shot a 5 minute test trailer for my show entitled LIFT THIS! which I pitch as Cheers in the gym.
I have also written three episodes for this half-hour sitcom and am trying to get it off the ground.
Former WWE Champion Chris Jericho makes an appearance as Vernon. I am aware the sound and acting could have been better. (I play Hershel - lol)
Lift This! began as a feature movie script PUSHIN' WEIGHT which I then reformatted into this show.
My background:
1995 Teenage Heavyweight Champion
Former Fitness Editor for three magazines
Former IFBB Official
I moved to LA from NYC 2 years ago in pursuit of this dream.
I welcome all comments.
Hollis
hllpac@sbcglobal.net
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it's a great start. not a huge fan of the southern character, but other than that it's got potential.
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i don't know dude maybe if u put Serena in that thong instead of that fat ass ppl might watch.
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Could turn into something good. I liked it.
Needs more racism
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Good luck. You need to hear the truth in order to improve a weak product:
Horrible music & mediocre writing. Poorly delivered, unfunny lines. Nothing at all to hold interest. It's a far less good version of The Gym.
As a result, badly in need of nudity and as mentioned, some racism.
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Its a good start and has potential, good stuff!
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that yoga teach has a nice thick lower half
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Hey guys,
I have shot a 5 minute test trailer for my show entitled LIFT THIS! which I pitch as Cheers in the gym.
I have also written three episodes for this half-hour sitcom and am trying to get it off the ground.
Former WWE Champion Chris Jericho makes an appearance as Vernon. I am aware the sound and acting could have been better. (I play Hershel - lol)
Lift This! began as a feature movie script PUSHIN' WEIGHT which I then reformatted into this show.
My background:
1995 Teenage Heavyweight Champion
Former Fitness Editor for three magazines
Former IFBB Official
I moved to LA from NYC 2 years ago in pursuit of this dream.
I welcome all comments.
Hollis
hllpac@sbcglobal.net
It's not good. Its not the writing....its the actors. Professional actors would make this so much better.
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It's not good. Its not the writing....its the actors. Professional actors would make this so much better.
i hate to say this. But i agree with VVV ;D
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Vernon's the SHIZNIT! Agree that the yoga instructor is bangin
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It's not good. Its not the writing....its the actors. Professional actors would make this so much better.
Nope, everything needs a rework including the writing.
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Nope, everything needs a rework including the writing.
yeah i agree on that to. its a sitcom but there is nothing funny about it.
nice juggs on the yoga instreuctor though she's a keeper
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Good idea.
Difficult to judge wether script is funny due to "actors" not being pros in comedic delivery.
Polish it up, and dont give up.
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A sitcom in a gym setting is a tough one imo...
A twist could make it funny...
like a fresh off the bus personal trainer who mistakenly gets a job in a gay gym without realizing it is gay and spending the rest of his time being mistaken for being "one of the boys"
problem being he really needs the money for whatever his real dream is and being mistaken for a gay trainer makes him way more money than coming out as actually being straight...
complicates his lovelife too in obvious ways...
more of a cable show though i guess... ;)
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Hey guys,
Thanks for your feedback.
This trailer is just a test.
The three scripts I have written have fully developed characters. I had put this trailer together to show interested parties what my show could possibly be.
The pilot "Beauty and the Stink" sets up the show's premise - in a similar fashion to CHEERS.
I have been a huge fan of our sport since I was 13. (31 now) and my dream episode would involve Mr. Olympia visiting the gym. Serving in the IFBB was one dream come true.
I first wrote Pushin' Weight - sort of a Rocky meets Clerks and from that developed Lift This! I have about 50 episodes in some stage of writing and a highly detailed character bible.
I am told you must work in TV to make a new show such as this. SO I am now writing another feature (my 7th) and then if that goes I will represent my show.
My humor is 2Pac meets Dice Clay and this show, the way I would like to see it done would probably best play on Spike TV, USA, SHowtime, HBo or Fx.
Hollis
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Hey guys,
Thanks for your feedback.
This trailer is just a test.
The three scripts I have written have fully developed characters. I had put this trailer together to show interested parties what my show could possibly be.
The pilot "Beauty and the Stink" sets up the show's premise - in a similar fashion to CHEERS.
I have been a huge fan of our sport since I was 13. (31 now) and my dream episode would involve Mr. Olympia visiting the gym. Serving in the IFBB was one dream come true.
I first wrote Pushin' Weight - sort of a Rocky meets Clerks and from that developed Lift This! I have about 50 episodes in some stage of writing and a highly detailed character bible.
I am told you must work in TV to make a new show such as this. SO I am now writing another feature (my 7th) and then if that goes I will represent my show.
My humor is 2Pac meets Dice Clay and this show, the way I would like to see it done would probably best play on Spike TV, USA, SHowtime, HBo or Fx.
Hollis
Great idea. Good luck.
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Hey guys,
I have shot a 5 minute test trailer for my show entitled LIFT THIS! which I pitch as Cheers in the gym.
I have also written three episodes for this half-hour sitcom and am trying to get it off the ground.
Former WWE Champion Chris Jericho makes an appearance as Vernon. I am aware the sound and acting could have been better. (I play Hershel - lol)
Lift This! began as a feature movie script PUSHIN' WEIGHT which I then reformatted into this show.
My background:
1995 Teenage Heavyweight Champion
Former Fitness Editor for three magazines
Former IFBB Official
I moved to LA from NYC 2 years ago in pursuit of this dream.
I welcome all comments.
Hollis
hllpac@sbcglobal.net
Would you create an episode about Goodrum? A quasi-retard that thinks he's a bber.
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Would you create an episode about Goodrum? A quasi-retard that thinks he's a bber.
Great concept; it would apply to 2/3s of getbig members. ;)
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Would you create an episode about Goodrum? A quasi-retard that thinks he's a bber.
Good Idea, that has potential.
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Holla Hollis,
Good to see you giving your take on things to the biz. Let me know if you need a comedy writer. I think your idea has potential. There is an unlimited amount of comedy to mine in a gym setting. It all comes down to making that script reader laugh. Trust me, I used to read scripts.
Keep up the good work!
Special "Crunch NYC" Ed
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I would concentrate on getting the pilot perfect before worrying too much about a full season and beyond.
Don't forget if it got picked up by a production company/tv network it would be assigned writers to come up with new story ideas each week.
I would concentrate on a strong protagonist who is definitely NOT from the gym world to start with.
Might be a straight laced guy who inherits a gym from his dead uncle or something. In the pilot he has no plans to stick around but be the end he decides to stay and run the place... might be because he falls for the hot manager or he can't sell the building unless there is an ongoing, profitable tenant.
His plan is to stay for a short while but he never leaves - until the show gets cancelled obviously.
The audience would see this world through his eyes each week as an outsider since most couch potatoes aren't gym people lets face it.
Every independant gym struggles in most markets so the corporate gyms rate a mention as a big brother figure hanging over the gym.
The fish out of water angle makes the most sense to me otherwise its a show about gym people for gym people and who really cares about that?
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jwb,
interesting idea.
My protgagonsit, Marty "The Diamond" Calloway is a former up and coming athlete - bodybuilder who's career was cut short. Diamond's Gym is his home. Much like Sam Malone was an ex-athlete in Cheers.
They are a family so-to-speak and it is Serena who is the outsider.
The show pits Marty and Serena together. Whereas Marty is a meat-eater, Serena is a vegan. Whereas Marty is into weight training, Serena is into yoga. Marty is OCPD and Serena has fun playing with that.
Hershel is Marty's best friend and jealous of his friend's former bodybuilding success. A white guy trying to be a rapper and picking up girls.
Vernon still lives with his mother. He is ripped year long and drinks and smokes. He is prejudice and negative.
Candace has the face of Halle Berry and the body of Nel Carter.
Magda is the Polish model.
Telly is the gay Yoda of trainers.
Shelly is the hick maintenance man - the Woody character.
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It would work better with 10-15 getbig regulars in the roles.. ;D
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Special Ed,
Thanks for your kind words.
Forgive me, have we met?
Hollis
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Bump!
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good premise.... but the first half of that trailer is pretty slow, I would re-edit it, and the chemistry between the owner and the yoga instructor is not coming across and that is pretty crucial...also tell your actors that acting is not about doing canned line readings...they need to learn their Actions...get them into some Miesner classes...they are not working off each other...if you ever got picked up, they would all get fired.
btw the gay partner joke was pretty funny, never heard that one before.
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ok...
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im sorry man im not liking it
i think the idea is great but the actors are horrible...they seem to rigid and like theyre reading from cue cards
i like the gay asian and the hersehel guy-i dont like anyone else
u need to include people from getbig on here...the characters on this sire would be great for the show
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Jericho was great, none of the other characters held my interest at all.
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has potential fire everyone involved in audio unless the editor decided to add his own controls and mixes that turned the music / voice into junk
but other than that its impressive and gives a clear idea of what this is and a great mix of stuff
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If you want to make the show great you have to have good writing, I think for your first episode you guys should bludgeon an asian prostitute and hijinks would occur trying to dispose of her body. Americans like stuff that's real.
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Funny thing is i pitched the Gym Sitcom idea to NBC, i just wrote them an email about a year ago, i said i want it to be like the sitcom "The Office" but put it in a gym setting. I never herd back! lol. I think eventually NBC or will come out with a sitcom like this, sad thing is they'll develop it themselves and wont take your idea, saves them money. Or they'll find better writers etc.. The gym is filled with drama and would make for a great sitcom I'm surprised theres not one out yet already. You have to realize the that the majority of people that sit at home at 8pm are fat lazy un healthy people, and i don't know if they would be into watching a bunch of in shape good looking people work out etc.. but who knows.
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Finally a show that gets right to the heart of the human condition. ::)
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Its a great idea. That fat guy will be sure to be a star!
You also need to add a black character (although Cheers didn't have any black guys in it did it???)
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pretty bad , you need some real actors, and better looking people. but ya never know this drek could be the next hit. no accounting for taste.